Wednesday, November 3, 2010

gothic story


“ill be back before you know it ” He said to his wife a six years. “I know but a year is a very long time to go with out you” the wife said with love and fear in her eye for she knew this could be the last time she would ever see him. “ill always be faithful to you, no matter what” the woman wisped with tears streaming down her face. They shared one last hug, one last kiss, and one last goodbye, before he marched off with three hounded other men wearing that damn camouflage suit that she hated so much. She watched as he joined the amorphous blob of men, watched as he boarded a plane, and watched as he left her, with know one to keep her company, for the first time in 6 years. She stood alone and cried silently for a while and vowed to herself that she would always and forever love him and keep that promise because it was the only thing he ever asked of her. Three months after her husband had left her, the Wife had grown very lonely.  One day she went into town to buy some groceries. While looking at the watermelons she realized she had no idea how to tell if a watermelon was ripe or not because her husband had always picked out he watermelon, which made her immediately succumb to tears. The woman missed her husband with every ounce of her heart and wanted nothing more then to talk to him because they could only write letters to each other so it would be weeks before she would hear from him. As she was weeping in the middle of the fruit department she felt a tap on her shoulder and turned around to see a man with a very kind face looking at her and he said “excuse me miss but is every thing alright?” She tried to pull herself together and said, “yes, yes I’m fine. And what’s it to you?” in a stern and slightly annoyed tone.  The man replied in a soothing tone “ because everyone needs to know their cared for” and then he walk away from her leaving her speechless and smiling. She then picked up a watermelon, made her perches and went home still thinking about the man and smiling. A few days later, she was still baffled by the man’s kindness, at this point she was determined to find him and thank him. So every day for a fortnight she went to the grocery store looking for the man and had no luck. Until one day when the woman was there to actually buy food for herself, she saw him. Her knees and hands started trembling because she was so nervous. She though to her self “why am I so nervous to talk to this man? I only want to thank him, nothing more and nothing less.” She walked up to the man and said “excuse me” The man turned around and smiled with delight when he say that it was the woman. He said “well look who it is!” The woman said “You really made me feel a lot better the other day and I would love to properly thank you so, thank you.” The man looked at her and smiled then replied “ you can properly thank me by telling me your name.” “Stella” she said with a grin. “Sean” he said while admiring her hair. “And now that we properly know each other it would be rude of me to not ask you to dinner” Stella replied to this is a some what disappointed tone “I have a husband whom I love very deeply” To which he replied  “ just because you have a husband doesn’t mean you cant have friends.” The woman smiled and said “I guess your right” then she gave her directions to her house and when on her way. Over the next couple of months Stella and Sean became very close and Stella started developing feelings for Sean and she knew he had feelings for her but they never spoke of it. Until one night when the two where at Sean’s house talking about their lives and dreams when Sean leaned over and kissed Stella, she was alarmed and horrified at first, but then she realized that she felt butterflies like she had never felt before in the pit of her stomach. And Stella never left Sean’s house that night. The next morning when Stella woke up from her night of mischief and thought to her self how good it felt to not feel lonely, but then remember the promise she had made to her husband of six years and tried to block out her feeling of guilt. But she continued on spending time with Sean for the next few months and continued to write to her husband and her husband’s return was approaching quickly.  Stella had decided not to tell her husband of her affair because she knew it would break his heart. Stella and Sean had talked about her husbands return many times and they agreed that they could still be friends but noting more. It was not one week before Stella’s husband was supposed to return and she was spending all her time with Sean. By this time Stella had developed deep emotional feelings for Sean and in vise versa. It got to the point where she was not looking forward to seeing her husband. But the day finally came and Stella and Sean said their goodbyes and shard one last kiss before Sean left her house and Stella left to go pick her husband up at the airport. When Stella saw her husband for the first time in a year she was happy to see him, but did not feel the love for him that she did when he had left. She looked into his eyes and felt compassion, but not love. And then he picked up off her feet and kissed her, and still she felt nothing.

3 comments:

  1. i forgot to sign this but this was by Rachel

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  2. I think my comment got deleted..

    So I'll post another one!

    This is a really good story; ASPIRING WRITER RACHEL LYNN KAPLAN! I was a little surprised at the ending, not at the way it turned out, but because I was expecting more, like, how did Stella's husband react to Sean? Or something like that.

    Thanks!!

    --Maria

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  3. Rachel,

    I enjoyed your story very much. The context was well written, and I believe that anyone who reads this story will instantly become connected to what you portray. I find it ironic how you set up Stella giving Sean a last kiss and how she was attracted to him, as it was foreshadowed how Stella gave a last kiss to her husband one year prior. The passion between Stella and Sean is so great, that anyone is society would be able to understand and relate to how these deep emotional feelings succumb one into these relationships. Also, I liked how you left the feelings and conclusions of what will happen next between Stella and her husband for open interpretation. It is also ironic how feelings and love for one person can become so distant and non existent as they are controlled by a greater force. (Stella and her affair with Sean.) It was a great story, and it drew me in right away! Great job!

    Allison

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